Hi, it´s been a while since I´ve posted anything but I´ve been busy lately with preparing for recording an album. I have some new songs, some new lyrics and very soon I´ll have some new recordings as well. I have a few problematic lyrics to solve yet. One has a working title “Following people through the underground” and I´ll post what I´ve written by now and hope some suggestions will come soon.
Following people through the underground
Following people through the underground,
watching them closely as they unawarely rush around,
through the hallways with the neon lights,
mingling among them I observe and reinvent their lives.
There comes a lady in her fifties or so
dressed in a washed-out jeans and a sweater.
Sits on a bench, goes through her purse
to finally find a pack of slim cigarettes and a lighter.
Her face looks like she was very pretty as a girl
but then the life put some harsh lines on it.
I wonder what kind of work does she do…
The train arrives and in a second we´re both on it.
An old man, well dressed
sits down, all stressed,
crossing his arms around the suitcase,
looking at the floor with a worried face.
That´s more or less all I have for the moment. The idea is to use the first verse as a chorus and to go through a few more caracters you could meet on a random underground train ride. The problem I´m facing is that rhymes are weak, but to tell a story I really need those words I´m using and I cannot find any better solutions. I could go for a “just rhyme” way, but somehow I think this story could go deeper and I don´t want to make it shallow just for the sake of rhymes. I´d like to get some advices and think about them, otherwise I have the music and the arrangement complete and the recording will be scheduled in not more then 10 days, so I´m in a kind of hurry, I really feel I have a good song on my hands and don´t want to screw it up by weak lyrics.
